To heal I need you
to feel you
to touch you
in your rawness
as you tear me apart
till the tears flow....
Your beauty lies in
that you remain hidden
unrevealed
closeted
behind all the layers
so that no one else can
have a glimpse of you but me...
But only when
I can venture in there
into that empty space you occupy
where I can savor your feel
your fullness
and absorb you
and also release you bit by bit
day after day....
You are'nt my friend
nor are you my enemy
just my teacher
teaching me lessons
through challenges
that i have ignored so far...
I go to bed each night
feeling I have conquered you
just that bit
that little bit
and just when I get
a glimpse of the light ahead..
I also see the shadows..
24 comments:
Dear Jyotsna, I love this poem... I truly, verbosity-aside, really, really do...
absorb you
and also release you bit by bit
day after day....
just when I get
a glimpse of the light ahead..
I also see the shadows..
Heartrending and comforting in a single exhale. 'Comforting' in the sense that, I stand, weak-kneed, to mirror the pain...
Loved this poem Jyo! It is so heart-wrenching! Would love to see it posted elsewhere as well!
-- go to bed each night
feeling I have conquered you
just that bit
that little bit
and just when I get
a glimpse of the light ahead..
I also see the shadows.. --
Jyo... well expressed! i suppose thats the reality with growing up children!!! i dont know... not arrived there as yet, but seems like it would be true.
"I go to bed each night
feeling I have conquered you
just that bit
that little bit
and just when I get
a glimpse of the light ahead..
I also see the shadows.."
This was such an astute way of describing the self within the self, Jyotsna. Constant revisions, changing what doesn't work, keeping what does, accepting the light and shadows...
Which line do I point to? Which should I say is the most poignant of all? I am at a loss to say...
Its so filled with meaning and depth; truly you have captured the 'hidden'space of a woman so beautifully...!!
Thank you for this :)
its an ode to pain. beautifully expressed. thanks.
this person sounds beautiful. I can relate to needing to heal by feel and touch. This portrait is well written with tons of wonderful imagery.
beautiful jyotsna... its lovely...
here's what i wrote under the same title...
PAIN
Some strange pain shadows over me
Making me feel,
What I don’t want to feel
Making me do
What I don’t want to do
It’s a pain of joy
It’s a pain of sorrow
A pain that you might call ecstasy
A pain you may name guilt
The world denying me
My heart profoundly sure
Making me feel
What I don’t want to feel
Making me do
What I don’t want to do
A feeling ever so pure!!
wondering why you havent posted lately
Where did you go? It's dark out here.
Hi,I'm away for a short break of sorts..my daughters medical issues and visiting my parents in chennai--cant acces the mail here!was lovely to hear from you!will post once am back..
tx for all your comments.means a lot!
mermaid-hope you are doing well!
Gulnaz-am waiting to get back to mumbai soon:))
in chennai - Jyo - cmon... u cud atleast gimme a call me...
I hope your daughter is Ok. Let me know if I can say a prayer. I'll say it anyway.
Beautiful,
Makes me think how important my life is. Thank you
hi...beautiful poetry and writings here...do you mind if i link your
blog...
visit my blog at http://shubhodeep.blog-city.com
and tell me what you thought of my writings
Renuka,pls mail me your telephone contact! am here till 26th!
Kaveri,diti is fine,doing better!i am waiting for a chance to blog soon..:))
this piece is so honest, so touching, so real. i will drop by again to see what else you have written. feel free to check out my blog.
I'm glad Diti (is that her name?) is better.
i can feel the pain,
well put!
I loved the wat u wrote
"just when I get
a glimpse of the light ahead..
I also see the shadows.."
U've written beautifully....
wondering how things are with u
YO! JO! Greaaaaat to have you back..So missed you! It was empty in here! So hurry up and get back to doin what you do best..waitttting for ur next post !
*Huggs*
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