Carve me; Shape me as you will,
sculpt me, mould me as you wish.
Chipped edges to smoothen and fill,
with your artists brush, its gentle swish.
Challenge me to lessons, yet to learn,
nudge me on towards the end.
Emotions to delve in, beliefs to burn,
a cathartic journey with many a bend.
Light my shadows, dissolve my fears,
kiss my wounds and hold me tight.
A gentle touch to remind me you are near,
to build my strength and face this fight.
Not a fight, this, just an ordinary day
at life’s school, where I learn to make my way.
My 1st attempt at a sonnet.
16 comments:
if life can be curved with words I would have reached so you can take out your tools and shape it for me...Your words are smooth healer that cools each wounded spirit ...
Thank you for your words
And a wonderful 1st sonnet it is! -- one that's occasioned (so far) two sonnet-replies over yonder.
cheers,
d.i.
A good one. One day, I will publish my first sonnet on our site. Just not ready yet. You have a beautiful style.
Yes, this one...
I like the ambiguity of this, as well as the style. This could be a prayer, a plea to a lover, a child, or simply life.
very, very good first attempt!
Oh! and what a wonderful first attempt! Mermaid is right, this is so prayerful and serene, just like the beautiful picture below. I love the fact that your philosophy shines through your words, it shows us you :))
Huggs!
P.S: we WILL always be connected, never doubt it!
when you chip and carve so well, why do you need someone else- god, lover, whoever- to shape you ?
First attempt at a sonnet? I don't believe you! I feel that sonnets are one of the most difficult poetic devices to write. I admire you for trying and being brave enough to post it on your blog. My sonnets are safely hiding next to my volumes of Shakespeare.
i can see your thoughts. it's nice :).
wow.. oh is this called sonnet. hmm i had done this in school days. but not sure if they are worth to post
silence?
I like this poem, nice poetry
very beautiful...
excellent attempt. I love the comparison to sculpturing.
What's the difference between a sonnet and a poem?
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