Saturday, January 07, 2006

Sonnet-Untitled

Carve me; Shape me as you will,
sculpt me, mould me as you wish.
Chipped edges to smoothen and fill,
with your artists brush, its gentle swish.

Challenge me to lessons, yet to learn,
nudge me on towards the end.
Emotions to delve in, beliefs to burn,
a cathartic journey with many a bend.

Light my shadows, dissolve my fears,
kiss my wounds and hold me tight.
A gentle touch to remind me you are near,
to build my strength and face this fight.

Not a fight, this, just an ordinary day
at life’s school, where I learn to make my way.

My 1st attempt at a sonnet.

17 comments:

iamnasra said...

if life can be curved with words I would have reached so you can take out your tools and shape it for me...Your words are smooth healer that cools each wounded spirit ...

Thank you for your words

david raphael israel said...

And a wonderful 1st sonnet it is! -- one that's occasioned (so far) two sonnet-replies over yonder.

cheers,
d.i.

Enemy of the Republic said...

A good one. One day, I will publish my first sonnet on our site. Just not ready yet. You have a beautiful style.

velvetgunther said...

Yes, this one...

mermaid said...

I like the ambiguity of this, as well as the style. This could be a prayer, a plea to a lover, a child, or simply life.

Shubhodeep said...

very, very good first attempt!

Pincushion said...

Oh! and what a wonderful first attempt! Mermaid is right, this is so prayerful and serene, just like the beautiful picture below. I love the fact that your philosophy shines through your words, it shows us you :))
Huggs!
P.S: we WILL always be connected, never doubt it!

kuffir said...

when you chip and carve so well, why do you need someone else- god, lover, whoever- to shape you ?

stan laurel said...

First attempt at a sonnet? I don't believe you! I feel that sonnets are one of the most difficult poetic devices to write. I admire you for trying and being brave enough to post it on your blog. My sonnets are safely hiding next to my volumes of Shakespeare.

Student of Life said...

i can see your thoughts. it's nice :).

Known Stranger said...

wow.. oh is this called sonnet. hmm i had done this in school days. but not sure if they are worth to post

velvetgunther said...

silence?

x~nezitiC said...

I like this poem, nice poetry

ashok said...

very beautiful...

IRIS said...

Lovely:-))))

EATING POETRY said...

excellent attempt. I love the comparison to sculpturing.

Anand Sarolkar said...

What's the difference between a sonnet and a poem?