Saturday, December 10, 2005

Contemplation


In the marble orchard
of stark stillness
we remain separated in
time.

You bask in the sun
while I grieve in
the chill of the
shade.




Written for an exercise on S & Co(Ryze)



Photo Courtesy:Ashish Gorde

29 comments:

  1. nice, thought-evoking words!

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  2. Nice...contemplation!!

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  3. good post! interesting!

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  5. I'm not sure if this alludes to a life partner, but I immediately feel your loneliness. When a loved one reacts to a given situation in a different manner, it is so hard not to feel cold in the shade.

    Hopefully, you will meet again somewhere at the line where light meets dark.

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  6. light and shade...but different aspects fo the same....

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  7. I love this Jyo! :))

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  8. good! I saw it first!

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  9. Whoa!That was beautiful!The picture enhances the power of words!(even though i suspect the exercise was vice versa)

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  10. Shubho-thanks..the pic was thought provoking!
    Arzooon--tx for dropping by!
    Rohit-thanks :)
    Mermaid-it actually alluded to the pic posted for a writing exercise and the striking bit of the photo was the contrast between light and shade! thanks n hugs
    Sundar--thanks..:)
    Blue A--hugs and glad you loved it!
    VG--yes yes you did see it first..see how much i value your opinion :D :D
    Motorama--thanks,yes the pic is truly powerful!

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  11. You chose the ideal image for such a poem. I like the contrast you establish of the 2 mental states: this reads very well!

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  12. how are you J. catching you up after long time.

    vaishnav

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  13. wow! this is brilliant jyo! :-))

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  14. well written. the black n white picture I guess adds to the impact.
    great blog :)

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  15. Did you get my email about the blog? If not, I will mail another.

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  16. This is a beautiful moment of contemplation. The photo really brings together the sense of opposites. Well done!

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  17. nice "close reading" of those details (light & shade) in the photo.

    cheers, d.i.

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  18. One of the best I read on that theme :) Lovely!
    -KK

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  19. Wow Im wordless

    Loved this poetry

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  20. Looovvved it! ^_^ You have done extremely well on that writing exercise, Jo.

    Oh, by the way, have a truly blessed new year, dear. ^_^

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  21. Wish you a happy new year ahead!!!

    Keep blogging!!

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  22. This is truly poignant and starkly beautiful! You've captured the essence of the picture so well!

    Have a wonderful New Year!
    Huggggs! :)

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  23. Hey, happy New Year and thanks for posting.

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  24. lovely words, as ever. thanks so much for your wishes, Jyo. Wish you year full of happiness and joy. :-)

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  25. Anonymous9:47 AM

    Beautiful thoughts and poems.
    And yes, a woman does shape lives only sometimes it becomes difficult to shape her own :).

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  26. hey, i blogrolled you, hope u dont mind!

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  27. In the marble orchard
    of stark stillness
    we remain separated in
    time.

    You bask in the sun
    while I grieve in
    the chill of the
    shade

    with emotions being
    shuttled in winds.

    some how missed this exercise in ryze.

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  28. i am gonna put this thing in one of my blogs....mind if i??(courtsey: jyotsna)
    cuz this is too good.
    yea...too good.

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